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PostSubject: fantasy story off topic   Thu Feb 28, 2013 4:59 pm

This is where you tell me how great my story is and how brilliant a writer I am.
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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Thu Feb 28, 2013 5:36 pm

It's pretty good, the first part.

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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Fri Mar 01, 2013 3:39 am

Not bad, could be better but still good
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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Fri Mar 01, 2013 4:54 pm

Well duh it could be better, everything could be better.
Specific criticisms?

A new chapter is out! Things actually start to happen and th main character appears
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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Sun Mar 24, 2013 12:06 am

Looks great! Keep it up!

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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Sun Mar 24, 2013 1:38 am

Thanks! I've got some more done, but its mostly fallen to the side now. With the comic and stuff. I'll finish up the latest chapter soon then.

I kind of felt like no one read it, with the lack of feedback
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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Sun Mar 24, 2013 4:06 am

Well Chapter 2 was interesting. I love Elves.

Feedback:
-Minor Grammar mistakes but doesn't take away from the story
-Nice Word Choice, it had a lot of voice


and finally........


THE AWESOME ELF!
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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Sun Mar 24, 2013 4:15 am

Spoiler: he dies

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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Sun Mar 24, 2013 11:35 am

Between what happened on 3 March and yesterday... I kinda forgot to read this ^_^"


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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Tue Mar 26, 2013 10:43 am

It's great~♥️

We should have a story where everybody gets a chance to post a chapter! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Tue Mar 26, 2013 11:08 am

Uh, I can't draw. Neutral

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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Tue Mar 26, 2013 11:20 am

You're talking about the comic Facepalm

This thread isn't for the comic, it's for this Link.
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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Tue Mar 26, 2013 11:52 am

Mistakes can happen. Razz

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PostSubject: Re: fantasy story off topic   Tue Mar 26, 2013 3:13 pm

Anyways, that's a good idea Kim. I'll start one
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